Scream
Wednesday, January 28, 2009
Why can’t you see?
The wreck, that’s me
Waiting forever
For your love
Something surreal
That’s never to be
It hurts so bad
The pain that’s me
And I am tired
of false smiles
In front of you
Only thing that you can see
I wanna succumb to
The storm that’s me
And don’t even wish
to fix this pain
Soiled dreams
Broken myths
And I will burn it
Your shadow that‘s me
back to the truth
The harsh reality
Nothing is forever
Not even you and me
© 2009 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: the image is googled
The wreck, that’s me
Waiting forever
For your love
Something surreal
That’s never to be
It hurts so bad
The pain that’s me
And I am tired
of false smiles
In front of you
Only thing that you can see
I wanna succumb to
The storm that’s me
And don’t even wish
to fix this pain
Soiled dreams
Broken myths
And I will burn it
Your shadow that‘s me
back to the truth
The harsh reality
Nothing is forever
Not even you and me
© 2009 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: the image is googled
24 comments:
You come back after a writers block and claim this is not a poem?
This looks like a poem to me :)
The ending "Nothing is forever Not even you and me"
doesnt seem to agree with the tone of the poem...they never seemed together in the first place?
@ Venkata
the whole compilation is about the broken illusion. they were never meant for each other, but the realization came late. sometimes the myth of a perfect pair is too tempting and leads us to do stupid things, like thinking that we really know someone.... does it make sense now? :)
Long time but worth the wait :)
For some reason I have been finding it difficult to access your blog, hope it is temporary.
well I let it resonate in my head for a couple of days. Still the last line "Nothing is forever" seems to suggest that it lasted for sometime. So are you suggesting that they were together however fleetingly?
Interesting wild thoughts. We do come across emotional storms some times in life. How ever a skill ful sailor is never made in smooth tides.
Lastly "Woh sikander hi dosto kehelata hai, haari baazi ko jeetna jise aata hai" What say? Best regards.
@Venkat -
i don’t know if they were really "together" or not. maybe it was also an illusion that ended rather painfully. This poem deal with that aspect of love, when the "idea" of being loved by someone special is so tempting that you don’t see that it never actually happened :)
@Zero - Wild, it is :D .. your comment gave me the title for the poem..
nice,
liked the last 2 paras.
i guess all your poems are quiet negative, thou i like negativity but i think there should always be some kind of positivity in negativity.
anyway nice work
hoping to see a poem with a positive note next time.
@Maya -
trust me, i have tried writing "happy" poems.. but i m really pathetic :D ... but promise to write something which is not completely pessimistic :)
The fire within shows well. It surely is a poem
is this written by u?
BPO work from home
@Siladitya!
obviously dude!!!
don't ever try to make ur work a 3-D Picture. trying to say too much ends up in explaining people what it really meant and that my dear friend is a waste. its worth is worth written...
great going...
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Hey Chhaya, you seemed to have disappeared yet again :)
Waiting for your the next update...
why didnt i read it earlier?? maybe i wasnt supposed to....comment on it??
u know wat i wud say...illusions are not always surreal, nor are they real in a sense...Chhaya, u do justice to the pain..but, does it happen vice versa??
regards,
a pilgrim...
why didnt i read it earlier?? maybe i wasnt supposed to....comment on it??
u know wat i wud say...illusions are not always surreal, nor are they real in a sense...Chhaya, u do justice to the pain..but, does it happen vice versa??
regards,
a pilgrim...
hi cindy nice poem............take care
hi cindy nice poem............take care
Hey Chhaya, I never knew that you are such a good poet. Great work really. From now on I am going to closely follow your blog for sure.
:-)
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The Future Mantra
The reason you do not see this as a poem is mainly because you've expressed yourself here, perhaps.
You simply let your feelings flow out here via words. Apparently, that is a secret formula to some good poetry. That should answer your dilemma.
Now, I like this post. It is appropriate in expressing your internal expressions. I like it because its rawness, its simplicity, its honesty.
Good job! Keep writing!!!
@Brosreview -
am i that transparent??? lol .. i guess i was, in this poem.
My name means "Shadow" :)
I read Scream several times and wondered why you don't call it a poem. In fact I didn't know a clear definition of a "poem".
It is depressing like many of your other work. I have often wondered why you have chosen "sorrow" as your subject matter in general. On the other hand, as far as this composition goes, I think there is also a desperation in the scream. A desperate desire to get out of illusions and face the reality.
When I look at it this way, I cannot help going back to my own problems in distinguishing between the real and the unreal. I am never sure what the distinction is.
I liked the post, but I felt very depressed. May be that proves you are a powerful writer.
DD
@ Deep da- perhaps it was (the fact that i dont see it as a poem) bcz i wrote it like prose.. and then broke it in the form of a poem. I named it scream bcz the primary emotion behind the poem was that of anger.. mixed with sorrow... a kind of desperation, to be heard...
about me picking sorrow as my muse.. i guess its because i have never shared it with people in the real life.. its like a therapy, sharing it in the form of poems..
hope i made some sense :D
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