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Tuesday, January 12, 2010
It flows in the blood
the soul, within
Restlessness.
A thirst.
The need to move on
wherever, life may lead.
The moments of love
and the things unsaid.
Whispers under the
starlit sky,
lazy mornings, tender
still, I can’t stay
Wandering into the
desert, endless.
Swimming to the deeper sea.
Away from the faces,
voices and
the sepia memories
Keeping the vows,
the promises,
I cherish.
Yet move on, I must
breaking the strings
Living life
to the fullest,
happy, in my skin.
Starting something new, everyday
and sometimes, finish.
© 2010 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: the image is my own.
54 comments:
Hi Chhaya,
HAPPY BIRTHDAY AGAIN!
You sent me in the most beautiful trance I have ever been in. Was it heaven or was I amidst the most serene mountain deserts of Ladakh. I think you are already there in Ladakh.
Well, wherever you are have a wonderful BIRTHDAY, "Away from the faces, voices and the sepia memories".
Many Many happy Returns of the Day
Happy Birthday to you :)
Nicely written Chayya...
happy birthday! new experiences are what life is all about...well, maybe one of the things. smiles. liked the flow of this one...
There comes a time in life when we know it's time to move on, make new challenges. Your poem brought across to me that message. It take courage and confidence to move on but oh the joy of succeeding and the rewards.
I loved the poem.
Yvonne.
Many Many happy returns of the day ....
May GOD fulfill all your dreams....
My best wishes for all your steps...yes nicely written :)
Very nice post...
Happy Birthday :D
Hey Happy B'Day...
Lovey Post... Keep Moving... [:)]
@Raj : thank u so much once again for the Bday wishes :)
and no, i m not in Ladakh, though a part of me is always there
i took this pic when i was thre the last time.
@an ordinary gal, rohini, ankesh : thank u for the Bday wishes
@the idiot blogs : i prefer to know the reason why my work is nice or not-nice.. but i guess i have to do with the nicely written LOL :D
thanks for dropping by and for the wishes
@Brian : this poem is one of the most personal poems i have ever written...
i hope u liked it. thanks for reading.. i m rather disapointed cz i m not getting almost any feedback on this one.. good or bad.
@Yvonne : thank u for taking time to read the poem. i wrote it, trying to express what goes in my mind. Often, ppl try to preach me into being less of a wanderer ..
i try to tell them that i m very happy being the way i am. i never try to change anyone, then why shud i be expectd to do the same?
@Swapna : thank u for the wishes :)
Chhaya,
Let me commend you first on the most terrific title. Just the one letter explains a lot, doesn't it? And 'I' do not believe that saying 'I' is being egoistic, rather it is courageous because you declare to the world that 'I am solely responsible for everything rather say we and blame everyone if things ever were to go wrong'.
You describe in this poem quite soulfully about a person, which I think I don't need to elaborate on 'who'. I have seen enough (including my own!) of people talking of how life treats them, of how life has been unfair, of how life is blah blah and more blah. But, you have taken a beautiful approach by showing how you treat life, how you lead it the way you wish, how you and life are one entity.
Nothing is exaggerated. You describe normal happenings - there are ups and downs, there is sadness, there is longing, there is courage, there is love, there is the will to move on and succeed. All of this in this poem bring about a strong character.
A warm post indeed! :-) Happy birthday Chhaya. May you keep inspiring us all.
Three cheers to you,
Vittal
i could relate ..
"I", as it is a very strong titles for any piece. I wrote a song portion based on "I" quite a few years back, which I have not yet posted. It is a special one!
I like how simply you have explained everything without giving out a lot of information or details. Coming to think of it, you still have provided quite a lot.
You've balanced life, as such, quite well in this poem. And, it is this sustaining and cherishing of balance that gives the character a strong personality.
Nicely done! Keep writing!!! And, judging from the label - Happy Birthday Artist!!!
@Vittal : exactly! i have always found it difficult to make ppl understand that just because they feel differently, my life is not less than happy.
we all have different PoVs about what is important for us and what can be put on the backburner.
@Vicious : hmmmmmm
@Brosreview : first of all, thank u for the wishes :)
about the poem, while writing this poem, u were somewhere in my mind.. remember the conversation we had the other day, about Dr. H? I had said - I understand why he has to be the way he is I too, carry part of his persona. and I have always understood why he resists people (who actually love him, care for him) trying to fix his behaviour.
defence mechanism or not, every person has a right to be happy, even when others feel that s/he must be feeling miserable in her/his life.
Einstein had it right. everything is relative.
There are no gambits in life, only vague experiences with some good and bad moments. And no matter what, being happy should be the purpose of one's life.
Loved the poem, Chhaya. :-)
And that photograph, it's spectacular! You are a wonderful photographer, I should say.
I'm one day late, but still, accept my wishes. Happy Birthday! May all your dreams come true. :-)
hey...i guess it's too late to wish you a happy birthday, so i am hoping you had a happy birthday...
we will all agree of all the 26 letters 'i' is perhaps the most profound and definitely the most loved letter....i think we should consider life as a chance to experience this 3-d world(another firm believe in quantum mechanics)so, no point sticking to just same things,places or people(no matter how difficult), we have to move ahead get as many new experiences we can....
i loved the simplicity in the poem.....and share similar feelings though i am still quite confused...but if i ever write 'i' i might need to borrow some of your lines....hope you wont sue me for that....i guess we loners can do this much for each other..
Hey Happy Bday .....
:( Belated...
Sorry I couldnt check this place yesterday!!!!!!
Wow... You poems are getting better and better each day..:-)
And this one with a positive tone , makes me feel sooooo happy.....
:-)
HBD once again!!!
Belated Happy Birthday Chhaya!
The poem has a good positive feel to it, but I think the flow could be better by reducing the number of pauses (commas). Just something I noted from a layman's point of view :)
Whoa....
first of all the title surprised me very much..then i wondered before reading it, what possibly this poem can offer me when the title itself is just "I".
What i realized after reading the poem is such a wonderful feeling that can only call your work a fantabulous work yaar..
I mean it..You see..putting yourself into the shoes of the person of the protagonist, it clearly tells you the journey he/she went through..
What else can be more realistic than a poem like this where moving on is written in the same lane, where you have also written about the agony the soul is going through..
Beautiful work...I wish i can write so deeply like u do..
Cheers
Mahesh
This reminds me of a Rafi Song.... "Mein zindagi ka saath nibahta chala gaya..."
but sometimes it becomes difficult to continue without feeling really bitter about this life.
Belated B'day wishes, dear..
That was an energitic and inspiring poem. Title also very smartly put! Reminds me of the saying - 'Miles and miles to go before I sleep'..
@Karthik : I had read somewhere that Happiness is your own responsibility. I firmly believe in it. Nobody has a perfect life, but there is always a way to make it better..
thank u for the Bday wishes and thank u for the comment abt the picture. it was taken in Ladakh :)
@Oxymoron : i m sure you will give out the credit if you borrow any lines.. otherwise i can always sue you ;)
@WhatsInAName : thank u! and i m glad i cud write something positive ;)
@Rachna : i have always give importance to the pauses in the poems... the commas are deliberate
and thank u so much, for the wishes :)
@Mahesh : awwwwwwwww... thank u for reading the poem with so much attention to the details :)
@Suresh : the poem is not about sath nibhata chala gaya its about actually living the one wants... being happy the way s/he is, without making any compromises..
@Vidya : yes, something like that :)
thanks for the wishes :)
I deliberately wanted to read this poem outside of the 'B-day aura' ... hehehe. To me, such a creation could be a wonderful self-tribute ... sort of a push that we all need to give us at times. And what better date than the birthday.
Speaking of the thirst, that's the crescendo of trying to lead the good life. Memories, sweet and sour, and definitely dilemmas and setbacks will come as lessons in this walk.
The point which could never be ignored is the wish to live a full life ... with those who needs the love, and be loved. And being happy in the skin is also happiness ... the rest, as you rightly said, is the thirst! :)
P.S: Hope I understood the poem right this time! ;)
Hi Chhaya. Happy Birthday
Great to see the real Avatar of You
Lovely figure
Killer eyebrow and just 22? ;)
Poem of a bold single girl
Not yet constrained
By couple concerns
Freedom maintained.
@ Pete
@Pete : hehe. that is just an avatar, not me. and indian girls are almost always blessed with nice eyes and eye-brows ;) :P
and i m surely not 22. Yes, still in my 20s, but older than 22 :D
thnx for the feedback on the poem and for the wishes :)
nice..nice..
wonderfully written
nice.. very differnt from what u generally write
Plz don't publish my last comment on Haiti.
some spamming/virus problem.
extremely sorry for the trouble.
@idle : yes. u got it ekdum right :)
@Sorcerer, Uncommon sense : thank u guys :)
@Raj : i hvnt :) .. dont worry.
i knew it was something fishy cz i m sure u know that i dun have to be reminded about it ..
been keeping track ..
No harm. No foul. :)
Hi Chhaya
Not directly related to your art in words checkout the paintings and sketches PointSingularity86 (An Open Mind) has created at http://sujittupe.blogspot.com/ quite a gift.
Pete
@Pete : i will surely check it :)
sepia memories..what a splendid expression..pleased to meet your encapsulated being in the last stanza.
cheers..ta
Your words are very inspiring!!
@TT : thank u so much :)
@Chaotic Beauty : i think this is your first comment @ my blog...
so nice to have a new visitor. and thank u so much for the kind words :)
i will visit ur blog v soon!
"Starting something new everyday and sometimes finish...."
Profound words...Loved this one! :)
Hi Chhaya,
wish you a belated Happy Birthday!! sry i came here quite late...
there was so much withing those few words. there is a longing, there is love,
there is a desire to hold on to the past an take a leap towards the future... that was superb!
@Ashley : this poem kind of shaped itself :)
thank u for the kind words ... those lines are my favorite too. describes me to the T
Me taking a longish break this time ... alone in Pune for the last week ... trying to settle as fast as possible in a not so known world.
Will try to get back soon ... I promise!
those lines are beautiful. i actually dont have any words to describe it...beautiful....
am going back down there,
the soft earth rests my soul...
memories of a shattered heart,
away from your painful love...
tc...
regards,
A friend...
@the - sillhouette : thank u :)
beautiful lines.. when are u gonna convert em into a poem?
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