Haiku Efforts - 3
Wednesday, February 13, 2008
Footsteps
I miss a heartbeat
Is it you?
my fingers bleed
torn by the pieces
of your heart
tears melt
with smiles and dreams
In your arms
Lightening, they say
never strikes twice
what about love?
PS: they are just efforts, not technically haiku
© 2008 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: the image is googled
I miss a heartbeat
Is it you?
my fingers bleed
torn by the pieces
of your heart
tears melt
with smiles and dreams
In your arms
Lightening, they say
never strikes twice
what about love?
PS: they are just efforts, not technically haiku
© 2008 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: the image is googled
5 comments:
I am curious, what does Haiku mean?
Thanks for the information. I do find this style very interesting maybe because I enjoy any form of expression that says a lot with just a few (images or words).
Although, I am still not very clear with the style (syllables) but I too feel that you seem to have captured the essence of it on most occasions, beautifully.
Keep going :)
Thanks.
Open the sky……..the sky of your heart…..you’ll find love. (my haiku ans.) How are you doing, my li’l Chiku? Long time no see, no msg. Hope you will be fine & fit as usual. Take Care & Cheers….….Ramesh
specially last one haiku..
what about love...
bahot ku6 pu6 jaata hai ye.. what about love..
Apart from the syllable count, these lines are quite good!
You see, this is what makes it all the more challenging, doesn't it? But, let me alert you, please do not get so carried away with syllable counts and other poem-related theories to such an extent that you compromise on expression and the overall feel of your poem, okay.
Good luck!
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