Romance : under 100 words

Tuesday, January 5, 2010


“Grandpa! Grandpa! ”

“Yes Kiddo! ”

“Are you going to work? ”

“No Kiddo! I am retired now! ”

“Then why are you shaving? ”

He laughs.

“Dad only shaves when he is going to office. ”

Grandpa finishes shaving and picks me up. I touch his face. He has a few nicks. Must be his shaking hands.

“You don’t have to shave now Grandpa! You don’t go to work so no one will mind! ”

“Your Grandma will, little one. ”

He smiles.


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© 2010 by Chhaya. All rights reserved

PS: this is the first instalment of a series covering various genres. I got the inspiration from Karthik’s blog! I will keep these writings less than 100 word long.


Image by Domenico Ghirlandaio (1490)

57 comments:

Sorcerer January 5, 2010 at 8:22 PM  

poor kid.. let him wait till he gets into a corporate.

Brian Miller January 5, 2010 at 8:28 PM  

a wonderful little tale...shaving for gramma. it is th small things that make all the difference in love.

Yemiledu January 5, 2010 at 9:13 PM  

Hey that was short and sweet!
The picture looks good too :)

mario January 5, 2010 at 9:27 PM  

u r spoiling me by giving me a good read for every night...keep up the good work :)

wud also luv to c u try ur hand at bikini stories :)

Anonymous,  January 5, 2010 at 9:32 PM  

Seriously telling, kinda boring. I hope you don't mind it. :)

Thanks,
S!

Also, comment under the post doesn't work in Firefox. Not atleast for me.

RAJ47 January 5, 2010 at 9:50 PM  

Hi Chhaya,
Nice to hear romance from you that too without any twists. Gr8!
Not only Grandma but even the Kiddo will mind a rub of his cheek. No guest will like his cheek kissing.

Chhaya January 5, 2010 at 10:58 PM  

@E : grrrr

@Sorcerer : thanks for dropping by

Chhaya January 5, 2010 at 10:59 PM  

@Brian : thank u so much. Yes, love basicaly depends on these subtle things.

Chhaya January 5, 2010 at 11:00 PM  

@Yemiledu : thank u!
and yes, the image is not my own. hope u noticed the disclaimer in the end. its a very old painting. still, i loved it!

Chhaya January 5, 2010 at 11:01 PM  

@mario : thank u

@Anonymous : i use FireFox and its working perfectly. i also confirmed with a few other users.
btw, why not sign in with ur name? and i dont mind u telling me that u found it boring. i can take criticism in a proper way :)

Tanushree Pillai January 5, 2010 at 11:30 PM  

I am here for the first time.

So sweet and romantic... just loved it. :)... When its love and romance, age is just a number...

Do check out my blog and write comments about my musings.

Chhaya January 5, 2010 at 11:33 PM  

@Tanushree : thank u so much! love has nothing to do with age... :)
i have actually based this thing on my own grandparents. they were always soooo in love :)

btw, i will visit ur blog soon, for sure :)

keep in touch!

vicious January 6, 2010 at 12:12 AM  

all i can say is its simply AWESOME!!!

Brosreview January 6, 2010 at 5:08 AM  

Hmm, I like the idea, the purity here, the reasoning here. Sometimes you do something just for your loved one to smile back. I am sure there are many happy people, but I am not sure they are contented. These small gestures made simply for your loved one, when acknowledged brings contentment.

I can relate to this. Simple, sweet, and a nice message for the pretentious lovers whose motif has mostly been negative.

PS: You are making me miss my Annie now.

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 8:47 AM  

@Vicious, Yvonne : thank u :)

Karthik January 6, 2010 at 8:49 AM  

Lovely!
Never knew that the purity and innocence of a child, and the meaning of love could be captured in just under 100 words. :-)
Loved it. Waiting for other genres to manifest.

P.S. Thanks for mentioning my name. I appreciate it. :-)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 8:50 AM  

@Brosreview : i wud like to imagine that his gesture was acknowledged, after all, he did say that Grandma will mind.. she wud mind if she cared :)

i have found that most of the time, something as simple as this carries the deepest sign of love.

PS: i wish u and Annie many happy years together :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 8:52 AM  

@Karthik : Thank u! i was realy inspired by that post u did, covering all genres. now i m not as good as u, so cant actually do them all at once, but i will try to put at least one post on each over next few weeks/months

PS: Obviously i wud mention ur name and the link. Acknowledgement must be give to the person who is the inspiration behind any writing :)

Mahesh Sindbandge January 6, 2010 at 9:39 AM  

That was very sweet Chhaya.. Such small love stories which result from encounters that we have in day to day life, matters alot.

Thanks for the attempt :)

swapnanjali January 6, 2010 at 11:02 AM  

Happy New year dear

yes these grandpa and grand Maa stories are really good :), i just love to spend time with them...i feel so relaxed by talking to them :)

IdleMind January 6, 2010 at 11:50 AM  

Waah! you know by now, I love writings that are short, crisp and poetic ... but can never attempt to write one. This was just perfect ... fresh from the new year. Keep rocking like this!

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 11:57 AM  

@Mahesh : yes, truth is often more beautiful than any writer can ever imagine :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 11:59 AM  

@Swapna : such a sweet comment :)

thank u

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 12:00 PM  

@idle : hehe, i knew u will like it :)
so glad i didnt disappoint u

Vittaldas Prabhu January 6, 2010 at 1:59 PM  

Chhaya,
This story has brought out the true sense of love and relationship. First it portrays the beautiful relationship between the grandfather and the granddaughter, and second, the love and unbreakable relationship between the old-by-age but young-at-heart couple.

The romance increases with age - I have heard people say and I believe so. And this aspect has been brought out very nicely. Also, what is best is that the child's innocence has been well protected by author (Ms. Chhaya :-)) and the wise grandfather. The last line is very beautiful - 'He smiles.' The grandfather knows the child won't understand and hence he has to shake it off her mind by distracting her and so he smiles. But within himself, the romantic self has always been alive and the spark is still there - this fact also brings a smile on his face.

Here is romance in the true sense. This is a neat, fully-dressed (I know you get what I mean here) and beautiful romantic story. I am sure it will be an eye-opener to all those whose definition of romance is limited.

Cheers!

Nethra January 6, 2010 at 3:06 PM  

I just smiled after reading this. It was beautiful. :)

Uncommon Sense January 6, 2010 at 3:50 PM  

title should have been a shaved grand pa.. lol

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 4:23 PM  

@Nethra : this story was successful if it made my readers smile.. so.. thank u :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 4:32 PM  

@Vittal : I always trust you to find the soul of a writing. and I admire your subtlety when u point towards my own treatment to the love here. You read between the lines and as a writer, I can ask for nothing more. thank u, for being so considerate. and yeah, I can so easily imagine u as that grandpa, 3-4 decades down the line :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 4:33 PM  

@US: why am i not surprised that u found something like that to say to a story like this ?

Oxymoron January 6, 2010 at 6:28 PM  

the true pleasures of life lie in the little things....your little story is the perfect demonstration of the fact...i really find it difficult to understand the long romances(those that span decades)hence i find it really difficult to express it in the form of a story....but the simplicity with which your story captures it has given me a totally perspective on the subject and perhaps a better understanding....brilliant stuff....

Tarun Goel January 6, 2010 at 6:55 PM  

Now this was good, actually good. :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 7:02 PM  

@Oxymoron : i have tried my hand at the longer version of romance too. i hardly ever read the books dealing with exclusively with love and relationships, unless its a classic, but then, almost every book deals with love.

as someone once said, ppl do things for basically two reasons, love n money. end of the day when u do something for money, its bcz u love having it :)

i wud suggest you to read Wuthering Heights . its my all time favorite love-story (if u hvnt). i had even written a poem dedicated to the protagonists from the story, Catherine and Heathcliff.

The Darklings

thanks for the kind words :)

Chhaya January 6, 2010 at 7:05 PM  

@Tarun : thank u :)

u are missed at my blog. wish u wud drop by more often :)

vidya January 7, 2010 at 8:29 AM  

Such a sweet story...enjoyed it:)

Chandrika Shubham January 7, 2010 at 3:01 PM  

Very touching sweet romantic story. Little things does matter in love. :)
Best wishes.:)

Chhaya January 7, 2010 at 4:34 PM  

@Vidya : thank u so much :)

Whats In A Name January 7, 2010 at 5:01 PM  

Choo Shweeet!!!!!
Some sunshine on your blog!!!! Yaay......
Loved it!!!

L. Venkata Subramaniam January 7, 2010 at 7:39 PM  

We may be ugly, old, wrinkled but there are still hopefully people who love us.

Lovely poem.

Chhaya January 7, 2010 at 9:28 PM  

@WhatsInAName : thank u! i m glad u liked it. i know u are sick of my dark-themed poems :P

Chhaya January 7, 2010 at 9:28 PM  

@LVS : its not a poem my friend :)

abt love, it knows no boundaries.. no wrongs, no rights.

Chhaya January 7, 2010 at 9:31 PM  

@Chandrika : thank u so much!

AJai January 7, 2010 at 11:42 PM  

Cute one. So nice. I loved the innocence of the little kid. And the reply by the grandpa was brilliant. Would floor any grandma. ;)

Sujith Kamath January 8, 2010 at 1:09 AM  

Justified the saying "Aam tab tak maza nahi deta(granny ko), Jab tak Pilpila nahi hota"

On a serious note, child's innocence and her attentiveness to the fact that her father shaves only when he is out to office, has been potrayed well...

Thanks Chhaya for dropping by and a request, please opine on this blog of mine (http://sujithkamath.blogspot.com/2009/11/are-you-atheist.html) As I felt this was more better a choice to create an impression on first readers than the one you read.

Thanks again

Chhaya January 8, 2010 at 1:23 PM  

@Ajai : hehehe... i wud give anything to be that grandma :P

Chhaya January 8, 2010 at 1:24 PM  

@Sujith : thank u ..

i will read that post v soon :)

Ashley January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM  

Ah! Touching and sweet. :)

An Ordinary Gal January 9, 2010 at 12:03 PM  

so sweet post, loved the reply of Grand Pa ;)

D.Dasgupta January 10, 2010 at 4:36 PM  

Eternity frozen into an instant of time. A wonderful portrait of innocence standing face to face with wisdom. A pearl that glows without dazzling. Lovely piece of writing.

Deep-da

Pete January 10, 2010 at 5:07 PM  

Very cute. But granpa's nose needs to explain itself. The bumps are often caused by too much alcohol over the years.

Chhaya January 10, 2010 at 7:09 PM  

@Ashley, An Ordinary Gal : thank u so much :)

Chhaya January 10, 2010 at 7:10 PM  

@Deep Da : it always makes my day when you like my work :)

thank u, Deep Da :)

nil January 11, 2010 at 9:37 PM  

Hi,I happened to visit your blog at random.
Glad I did,you're good. Really!
Do come across my page some time. And hell yeah,Keep writing!
Hope to keep in touch!
Cheers.

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