Romance : under 100 words
Tuesday, January 5, 2010
“Grandpa! Grandpa! ”
“Yes Kiddo! ”
“Are you going to work? ”
“No Kiddo! I am retired now! ”
“Then why are you shaving? ”
He laughs.
“Dad only shaves when he is going to office. ”
Grandpa finishes shaving and picks me up. I touch his face. He has a few nicks. Must be his shaking hands.
“You don’t have to shave now Grandpa! You don’t go to work so no one will mind! ”
“Your Grandma will, little one. ”
He smiles.
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© 2010 by Chhaya. All rights reserved
PS: this is the first instalment of a series covering various genres. I got the inspiration from Karthik’s blog! I will keep these writings less than 100 word long.
Image by Domenico Ghirlandaio (1490)
57 comments:
Olle!
poor kid.. let him wait till he gets into a corporate.
a wonderful little tale...shaving for gramma. it is th small things that make all the difference in love.
Hey that was short and sweet!
The picture looks good too :)
u r spoiling me by giving me a good read for every night...keep up the good work :)
wud also luv to c u try ur hand at bikini stories :)
Seriously telling, kinda boring. I hope you don't mind it. :)
Thanks,
S!
Also, comment under the post doesn't work in Firefox. Not atleast for me.
Hi Chhaya,
Nice to hear romance from you that too without any twists. Gr8!
Not only Grandma but even the Kiddo will mind a rub of his cheek. No guest will like his cheek kissing.
@E : grrrr
@Sorcerer : thanks for dropping by
@Brian : thank u so much. Yes, love basicaly depends on these subtle things.
@Yemiledu : thank u!
and yes, the image is not my own. hope u noticed the disclaimer in the end. its a very old painting. still, i loved it!
@mario : thank u
@Anonymous : i use FireFox and its working perfectly. i also confirmed with a few other users.
btw, why not sign in with ur name? and i dont mind u telling me that u found it boring. i can take criticism in a proper way :)
@Raj : thank u
I am here for the first time.
So sweet and romantic... just loved it. :)... When its love and romance, age is just a number...
Do check out my blog and write comments about my musings.
@Tanushree : thank u so much! love has nothing to do with age... :)
i have actually based this thing on my own grandparents. they were always soooo in love :)
btw, i will visit ur blog soon, for sure :)
keep in touch!
all i can say is its simply AWESOME!!!
A lovely tale, very touching.
Yvonne.
Hmm, I like the idea, the purity here, the reasoning here. Sometimes you do something just for your loved one to smile back. I am sure there are many happy people, but I am not sure they are contented. These small gestures made simply for your loved one, when acknowledged brings contentment.
I can relate to this. Simple, sweet, and a nice message for the pretentious lovers whose motif has mostly been negative.
PS: You are making me miss my Annie now.
@Vicious, Yvonne : thank u :)
Lovely!
Never knew that the purity and innocence of a child, and the meaning of love could be captured in just under 100 words. :-)
Loved it. Waiting for other genres to manifest.
P.S. Thanks for mentioning my name. I appreciate it. :-)
@Brosreview : i wud like to imagine that his gesture was acknowledged, after all, he did say that Grandma will mind.. she wud mind if she cared :)
i have found that most of the time, something as simple as this carries the deepest sign of love.
PS: i wish u and Annie many happy years together :)
@Karthik : Thank u! i was realy inspired by that post u did, covering all genres. now i m not as good as u, so cant actually do them all at once, but i will try to put at least one post on each over next few weeks/months
PS: Obviously i wud mention ur name and the link. Acknowledgement must be give to the person who is the inspiration behind any writing :)
That was very sweet Chhaya.. Such small love stories which result from encounters that we have in day to day life, matters alot.
Thanks for the attempt :)
Happy New year dear
yes these grandpa and grand Maa stories are really good :), i just love to spend time with them...i feel so relaxed by talking to them :)
Waah! you know by now, I love writings that are short, crisp and poetic ... but can never attempt to write one. This was just perfect ... fresh from the new year. Keep rocking like this!
@Mahesh : yes, truth is often more beautiful than any writer can ever imagine :)
@Swapna : such a sweet comment :)
thank u
@idle : hehe, i knew u will like it :)
so glad i didnt disappoint u
Chhaya,
This story has brought out the true sense of love and relationship. First it portrays the beautiful relationship between the grandfather and the granddaughter, and second, the love and unbreakable relationship between the old-by-age but young-at-heart couple.
The romance increases with age - I have heard people say and I believe so. And this aspect has been brought out very nicely. Also, what is best is that the child's innocence has been well protected by author (Ms. Chhaya :-)) and the wise grandfather. The last line is very beautiful - 'He smiles.' The grandfather knows the child won't understand and hence he has to shake it off her mind by distracting her and so he smiles. But within himself, the romantic self has always been alive and the spark is still there - this fact also brings a smile on his face.
Here is romance in the true sense. This is a neat, fully-dressed (I know you get what I mean here) and beautiful romantic story. I am sure it will be an eye-opener to all those whose definition of romance is limited.
Cheers!
I just smiled after reading this. It was beautiful. :)
title should have been a shaved grand pa.. lol
@Nethra : this story was successful if it made my readers smile.. so.. thank u :)
@Vittal : I always trust you to find the soul of a writing. and I admire your subtlety when u point towards my own treatment to the love here. You read between the lines and as a writer, I can ask for nothing more. thank u, for being so considerate. and yeah, I can so easily imagine u as that grandpa, 3-4 decades down the line :)
@US: why am i not surprised that u found something like that to say to a story like this ?
the true pleasures of life lie in the little things....your little story is the perfect demonstration of the fact...i really find it difficult to understand the long romances(those that span decades)hence i find it really difficult to express it in the form of a story....but the simplicity with which your story captures it has given me a totally perspective on the subject and perhaps a better understanding....brilliant stuff....
Now this was good, actually good. :)
@Oxymoron : i have tried my hand at the longer version of romance too. i hardly ever read the books dealing with exclusively with love and relationships, unless its a classic, but then, almost every book deals with love.
as someone once said, ppl do things for basically two reasons, love n money. end of the day when u do something for money, its bcz u love having it :)
i wud suggest you to read Wuthering Heights . its my all time favorite love-story (if u hvnt). i had even written a poem dedicated to the protagonists from the story, Catherine and Heathcliff.
The Darklings
thanks for the kind words :)
@Tarun : thank u :)
u are missed at my blog. wish u wud drop by more often :)
Such a sweet story...enjoyed it:)
Very touching sweet romantic story. Little things does matter in love. :)
Best wishes.:)
@Vidya : thank u so much :)
Choo Shweeet!!!!!
Some sunshine on your blog!!!! Yaay......
Loved it!!!
We may be ugly, old, wrinkled but there are still hopefully people who love us.
Lovely poem.
@WhatsInAName : thank u! i m glad u liked it. i know u are sick of my dark-themed poems :P
@LVS : its not a poem my friend :)
abt love, it knows no boundaries.. no wrongs, no rights.
@Chandrika : thank u so much!
Cute one. So nice. I loved the innocence of the little kid. And the reply by the grandpa was brilliant. Would floor any grandma. ;)
Justified the saying "Aam tab tak maza nahi deta(granny ko), Jab tak Pilpila nahi hota"
On a serious note, child's innocence and her attentiveness to the fact that her father shaves only when he is out to office, has been potrayed well...
Thanks Chhaya for dropping by and a request, please opine on this blog of mine (http://sujithkamath.blogspot.com/2009/11/are-you-atheist.html) As I felt this was more better a choice to create an impression on first readers than the one you read.
Thanks again
@Ajai : hehehe... i wud give anything to be that grandma :P
@Sujith : thank u ..
i will read that post v soon :)
Ah! Touching and sweet. :)
so sweet post, loved the reply of Grand Pa ;)
Eternity frozen into an instant of time. A wonderful portrait of innocence standing face to face with wisdom. A pearl that glows without dazzling. Lovely piece of writing.
Deep-da
Very cute. But granpa's nose needs to explain itself. The bumps are often caused by too much alcohol over the years.
@Ashley, An Ordinary Gal : thank u so much :)
@Deep Da : it always makes my day when you like my work :)
thank u, Deep Da :)
@Pete : haha :D
Hi,I happened to visit your blog at random.
Glad I did,you're good. Really!
Do come across my page some time. And hell yeah,Keep writing!
Hope to keep in touch!
Cheers.
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